Analysis Monday – Cold

Every Monday we will be looking at a short extract from a text and analysing what and how the writer has written. Feel free to add your own comments! Thought this one would be approriate for the first post of April!

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“I don’t remember the date, the month. I don’t even remember the time of year. But I know it wasn’t summer. It was cold. Not like the cold of winter, when the gentle frost stings your nose. It was wet and chilly, disagreeable. Like the cold of late autumn, when the birds have already flown away, the trees are bare, the earth is dark yet the sky is too stingy to send a blanket of snow to cover its wretchedness. Or like the cold of early spring, when everything is still tentative, uncertain – when it seems the battle in the sky is not yet over, the sun has been taken prisoner, and the heroes of light could still turn around dolefully and say: “No, we won’t make it; the dark and cold are stronger than us – spring won’t win this time.””

German Sadulaev (https://www.theguardian.com/lifeandstyle/2010/nov/21/german-sadulaev-chechen-chechnya-war)

This is beautifully layered piece of writing explores his feelings of despair and loss when returning to Chechnya after the first war there.

– Lovely and peaceful (as suggested by word “gentle”) image but the writer has already informed you that this is not the kind of cold he is feeling – foreshadowing what is to come. 

– Rule of three – building up negative images, builds up to a climax of the earth is dark, showing how complete this cold is

– Personfication – showing that the sky, somethingnormally posiutive and beautiful, is now conspiring to create more misery

– Layering up of negative word choice – this all adds to the sense of sadness and hopelessness

– Extended Metaphor – references what the writer will talk about later in the passage but also adds to the mood and atmosphere of this paragraph

– Positive word choice to reinforce again the central images of this paragraph

 

Poetry Friday; Sheep – C. Kenneth Burrow

This is just a beautiful poem about bedraggled sheep who get a glimpse of the sun!

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Sheep

Huddled, rain-drenched, forlorn they stood,
Their fleeces blown one way;
The wet wind cried in solitude
About the failing day.

Leaves whirled below, aloft; the sky
Sagged like a sodden shroud;
No stir of life, no pleading cry,
Came from the draggled crowd.

Sudden the western portals wide
Opened on that gaunt fold;
Then lo, a flock beautified
With fleeces dripping gold!

C. Kennett Burrow

Poetry Friday; Firebird – Jean Kenward

There is nothing nicer than watching a real fire and the flames dance and fly up.

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The Firebird’

 

Fire – what lets you leap and spring,

fluttering your golden wing in the soft

and smoky air,

sending sparkles everywhere?

 

Fire – what makes you as you are,

sharing light with sun and star –

sharing all that you may be

with anyone as small as me?

 

Fire – what show you how to fly smoke

in spirals to the sky?

And, when you sink down

to rest, gives you ashes for a nest?

 

Jean Kenward

 

 

Analysis Mondays – Bus

Every Monday we will be looking at a short extract from a text and analysing what and how the writer has written.

Feel free to add your own comments/analysis below!

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From a newspaper article about kids not being allowed to drive their bikes to school. (http://www.thedailyparker.com/post/2012/05/29/372de670-e5f6-4cdb-a25b-2df3e0f8bb2d)

 

Thus, every weekday morning, scores of idling cars line up behind dozens of buses disgorging waves of kids. Amidst this, Janette and Adam—each of whom was about 5 feet tall—seemed like a pair of diminutive daredevils wading into a tsunami.

– Use of the word “every” which emphasises that it happens all the time.

– “scores” and “Dozens” – layering up of words to reveal just how busy the school is

– disgorging is such a beautiful word and it again suggests the sheer amount of kids and also the chaotic nature of the movement

– Love the metaphor of these intrepid children managing their way through the chaos (tsunami) – again layering up your understanding through use of word choice. The clever use of diminutive reveals just how brave these children are to push their way through

Poetry Friday; The Poetry Grand National – Roger Stevens

Love the central image of this poem – and how he uses what each of the features of language are to create this poem.

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The Poetry Grand National

The horses line up

They’re under starter’s orders

They’re off

 

Adverb leaps gracefully over the first fence

Followed by adjective

A sleek grey

 

Simile is overtaking on the outside

Like a pebble skimming the water

 

Halfway round the course

And Hyperbole is gaining on the leaders

Travelling at a million miles an hour

 

Adverb strides smoothly into first place.

 

Haiku had good odds

But is far behind – and falls

At the last sylla-

ble

 

And as they flash past the winning post

The crowd is cheering

The winner is

Metaphor

Who quietly takes a bow

 

Roger Stevens

Analysis Monday – Birthdays

Every Monday we will be looking at a short extract from a text and analysing what and how the writer has written.

Feel free to add your own comments/analysis below!

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“Birthdays plunge me into a great fog of dissatisfaction. It started on my 19th with a deep trepidation about leaving my teens. You could get away with just about anything by blaming it on teenageness but 20 seemed, like, totally old. Now 20 seems, like, totally a long time ago. A general feeling that I’ve under-achieved my way through life thus far is compounded by another year gone and not much changed. Yet another year where I failed to unpick life’s great mysteries: God, the universe and karaoke.”

Catriona Stewart (http://www.heraldscotland.com/opinion/13060935.the_birthday_dumps/)

– Great imagery – The imagery of the fog is perfect for describing that feeling that lingers around and makes it difficult to see your way through

– Trepdidation is the perfect word to use here- it implies the dread and fear that is felt as the writer gets a year younger.

– Use of teenage slang (,like, totally) helps to create an informal and humourous tone. It tells the reader that she isn’t taking herself totally seriously.

– Great use of the rule of three to help the self-mocking tone up. She uses an anti-climax (karaoke) to underscore the other two, more serious, points.

 

Analysis Monday – Autobahn

Each Monday we will be looking at a short extract from a text and analysing what and how the writer has written. Feel free to add your own comments/analysis below!

“Lucille was on an Autobahn no turnings off, no roundabouts, no dead ends or traffic lights stuck on amber, no wrong ways or surprises. Whereas I was somewhere in the middle of page 64 in the A-Z, and I was holding it upside down. Deliberately.

Candy Guard

– In this extract the writer describes two very different girls by comparing them to two different ways of travelling. Lucille is someone who is very organised and planned – knows exactly what is coming up ahead and is going exacrly where she wants to, wheras the narrator isn’t!

– Use of the dash lets the writer to expand on the point she is making about Lucille. By listening all the things that the Autobahn isn’t it builds a picture up in the reader’s mind about what exacrly the writer means, which she then sums up at the end of the list. This helps to establish in the reader’s mind exactly what Lucille is like.

– The contrasting image for the narrator is of a jumble – the middle of a map with all the interconnecting roads and images. She then expands on this to say that she is holding upside down, meaning it makes even less sense. This is someone who is not organised, nor knows where she is going.

– The short sentence emphasises the word “Deliberately” and reveals a lot about the character – being disorganised and lost is not a mistake or a character flaw, this is something she chooses to be and something she enjoys being.

Candy Guard is a writer and animator, her website is: http://candyguard.co.uk/